Coming from a person that often has difficulty taking constructive criticism, this little piece makes me so, so happy. Which is weird, but I guess the reason why is because the things you didn't like were so small!

I did have punctuation separating shifts in time and place, but I guess when I copied the text from my word document, the punctuation didn't follow or I thought I didn't need it because it was a new post online. I don't know.

As for Erandur being OOC, ugh. I know. It was difficult portraying him because, like you said, he's a priest of Mara and I see him being pretty patient and kind, but then in game when you stand too close he shouts, "What the-!" and moves away, as well as when you heal him he snaps, "I hope you're not expecting a thank you." I guess I just imagined that after spending so much time with my Dragonborn, he was comfortable enough to express things more honestly....?

Anyways, I'm so glad you liked it! I do have some other stories posted on here one about an Orc (Boltraz) and Ulfric, there's also another one featuring Cicero and The Listener (Kilah). So sorry about the shameless self-promotion. :\