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ANNOUNCEMENTS: UPDATED 12/16/2017

Happy Holidays, fellow Kinkmemers! I have returned and have no reasonable excuse for my absence except LIFE. I will be working on updating the archives. If anyone sees anything amiss, please let me know.

I am also hoping to find another Mod and an Archivist.

The more dedicated people we have in this Meme the less chance of it dying. I admit that being the sole keeper of the Meme is not great for the fandom. If something were to happen to me, for good, this place would go the way of the Fallout Kink Meme. Let's not let that happen! If anyone would be interested in Modding/Archiving, please drop me a line. Thanks! <3

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From: (Anonymous)

I enjoyed the fill, but as you asked for constructive criticism I will offer some.

I would like to echo the other Anon's suggestion that you invest more in your character's personality.

In this fic Kathryn did pretty much what any player character does, but you didn't really give us what she was thinking, or her sense of humour or honour or what she was feeling. I get that the fill is a) a one-shot and b) your first, so I'm recommending this as something to bear in mind for future fics. Because I don't know what's going through her mind bar the basics I find it hard to figure out how to relate or empathise or engage with her emotionally as a reader, if that makes sense.

As for the smut I really can't offer any advice other than to lose any inhibitions you may have, and let it last as long as you like (no pun intended). Smut is the part of writing I have the most trouble with (seriously, I go red as a beetroot once my DB starts taking of her armour).
Kathryn does jump from orgasm 1 to orgasm 5 to 10 a bit quicker than I'd have expected, (and I kind of hoped there would be more of her discomfort or being wrung out), but then the Dwemer were freakin' geniuses when it came to technology, so it's forgivable :P

Aela seemed to have been better fleshed out than Kathryn, which is both a positive and a negative, as I would rather know about your DB more than her companion (especially as we see more of K than A), but it's good to see their history and rapport together. You did that very well, IMO.

The part about yelling "stop in the old language" was quite the tease, but because it was irrelevant to the action (Aela just using her sword to cut Kathryn loose) made it stick out like a sore thumb. I don't think it's necessary, unless Kathryn's going to take up lessons in the Dwemer tongue, if you know what I mean :)

I really did enjoy the fic, and I hope you gain lots of confidence to continue working on fills, with Kathryn or other DB characters, as you get better and better :)

From: (Anonymous)

Hey, thanks for the advice.

I was planning on having Aela use that to stop the machine but couldn't find the actual word for stop anywhere and didn't want to get it wrong or make it up to have someone come and correct me so I thought I would just leave it in there.. :L
I understand that I didn't really mention Kat's character and I'll be sure to work on that for next time

I agree about the smut. It's hard to write and I therefore had trouble making it last very long, but I also found it a lot of fun!

Thanks for all the complements mixed in as well! The first reply didn't and it kind of knocked my confidence and made me not want to write anymore but your post has made me feel much better, so thanks! I'll look for another prompt to practice on :)

From: (Anonymous)

I really did like your fic Anon, and I hope you do continue writing. Like anything else, writing only improves with practice and repetition. Keep it up and you'll be a great writer - you've got potential, you just need to work on it.

Finding a beta reader might be a good idea, that way you'll get feedback and advice on grammar, spelling generally, and if the reader is within the fandom they'll be able to offer advice on keeping things in-character. It always pays to have another person cast their eye over something, just for tweaking and finishing touches, anyway. (Although I'm one to talk, never use one myself^^)

I get where you're coming from with leaving the Dwemer instruction in - I've done the same with my fics, realising after I've posted that some bits didn't need to be in there. I usually edit it when I'm reposting de-anon on my fic journal.

The best thing about smut is that everyone's tastes are different, and if you write what you find sexy, you'll find plenty of people who find the same thing sexy, too - but getting past the inhibitions can be tricky. Again, the more you do it the easier it gets :D

I really hope you write more fics with Kathryn, maybe just write a little character piece (for yourself) so you know what she's like, and if you're writing another fic with her you'll know how she'd think/act/react in whatever situation she's in.